Sink or swim?
A choice I,
And I alone,
Must make.
Treading water
Tires the more
I delay.
Clouds of confusion
Hover and rain
Down their tears
Upon these
Restless waters
That drown
My spirit.
A dry, distant horizon
Hints at light and
Beckons, and still
I delay.
Oops … there’s a shark.
~*~
This is my response to Kellie Elmore’s Free Write Friday challenge for this week.
This was fun … 😉
Thanks for visiting,
Dorothy
~*~
©Dorothy Chiotti, Aimwell CreativeWorks 2014
Shedding Light on the Family Tree 
aloha Dorothy. i like these words:
“Treading water
Tires the more
I delay.”
because in the statement there is no judgement and what is delayed is left to the reader to take in their own way. that to me leaves a lot of area to wonder around in and think about. (a good thing imo). aloha.
Thank you. I hadn’t thought about it that way but you are quite right ~ there are several ways in which this could be interpreted. I’ll it up to your imagination. 😉 Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment. Aloha! 🙂
The glint of hope in this is wonderful, even in the midst of darkness, there is always a light burning for us to find it. And sharks to keep up on our toes 😉 Love this.
Thanks, Kellie. This was a fun free write. It all started out so seriously and then at the end … oops! I like it when that happens. … Be well, Dorothy 🙂
I enjoyed this. Your perspective was great. The shark was a surprise! Yikes!
Benjamin
Yes, the shark was a surprise to me too. But, aren’t they always. 😉 … Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment. Be well, Dorothy 🙂
Well reading this was really fun too! Loved it!
Thanks! So glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
Just love your use of metaphors here and it can linger into a dark state but the Shark attack sort of shocked me out of that to get into a fight or flight mode. Very very good…I love this poem!!
Thank you. 🙂 … In this case the shark was a really pleasant surprise. Had no idea he’d make an appearance. But isn’t that what’s wonderful about free writing? You never know what will happen next. 😉
I know it’s like POP goes the weasel 😀
Good day!
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Break a leg! 🙂
Thank you!
I like this poem. But what most impress me is the picture above, showing the ocean.
Yeah, it’s a neat picture. Thanks for visiting …